This online digital writing course is designed as an extension writing course for year 8 students. Active knowledge making underpins the discussion activities where students explore and find texts that exemplify effective narrative structure, narrative techniques, and rhetorical devices. They create their own narratives and persuasive narratives, and through peer, self and teacher review, they revise their works for publication.
Orientation, Complication, Climax, Resolution, Coda, Description, Dialogue, Pacing, Lexical Chains, Rhetorical Devices
Year 8 Achievement Standard
Receptive modes (listening, reading and viewing)
By the end of Year 8, students understand how the selection of text structures is influenced by the selection of language mode and how this varies for different purposes and audiences. Students explain how language features, images and vocabulary are used to represent different ideas and issues in texts. They listen for and identify different emphases in texts, using that understanding to elaborate on discussions.
Productive modes (speaking, writing and creating)
Students understand how the selection of language features can be used for particular purposes and effects. They explain the effectiveness of language choices they make to influence the audience. Through combining ideas, images and language features from other texts, students show how ideas can be expressed in new ways.
Students create texts for different purposes, selecting language to influence audience response. They make presentations and contribute actively to class and group discussions, using language patterns for effect. When creating and editing texts to create specific effects, they take into account intended purposes and the needs and interests of audiences. They demonstrate understanding of grammar, select vocabulary for effect and use accurate spelling and punctuation.
Year 8 Content Descriptions
Language
Understand how rhetorical devices are used to persuade (ACELA1542 )
Text structure and organisation
Analyse how the text structures and language features of persuasive texts, including media texts, vary according to the medium and mode of communication (ACELA1543)
Understand how coherence is created in complex texts through devices like lexical cohesion, grammatical theme and text connectives (ACELA1809)
Recognise that vocabulary choices contribute to the specificity, abstraction and style of texts (ACELA1547 )
Literature
Responding to literature
Share, reflect on, clarify and evaluate opinions and arguments about aspects of literary texts (ACELT1627)
Examining literature
Recognise, explain and analyse the ways literary texts draw on readers’ knowledge of other texts and enable new understanding and appreciation of aesthetic qualities (ACELT1629 )
Interpret and analyse language choices, including sentence patterns, dialogue, imagery and other language features, in short stories, literary essays and plays (ACELT1767)
Literacy
Interpreting, analysing, evaluating
Analyse and evaluate the ways that text structures and language features vary according to the purpose of the text (ACELY1732 )
Apply increasing knowledge of vocabulary, text structures and language features to understand the content of texts (ACELY1733)
Creating texts
Create imaginative texts that raise issues, report events and advance opinions, using deliberate language and textual choices, and including digital elements as appropriate (ACELY1736)
Experiment with text structures and language features to refine and clarify ideas to improve the effectiveness of students’ own texts (ACELY1810 )
Use a range of software, including word processing programs, to create, edit and publish texts imaginatively (ACELY1738 )
English Textual Concepts
NARRATIVE: WHAT IT IS
Narrative is fundamental to thinking. When we think, we think in narrative form. Narrative can refer to a story itself or to the conventions by which we communicate and understand it. These conventions are the way we construct a world that sets up and depends on expectations of human behaviour to amplify it. They include the selection and organisation of actions and events into a plot and a suite of individualised or stock characters to carry the plot forward. A narrative is usually structured in such a way as to invite responder involvement through recounting challenges and characters’ attitudes towards them and moving towards resolution.
Narrative is a part of everyday communication to convey any message, be it political (an annual budget), commercial (a fashion collection) or institutional (public health warnings). In these messages, the elements of narrative may not be obvious and are inferred through personal identification with the situation.
WHY IT IS IMPORTANT
It is innately human to tell stories as this is the way we organise and shape life experience. We use narrative to connect people to information, values and ideas. Through narrative we explore human actions, interactions, motivations and reactions.
Teachers use narrative to engage students in learning and students use narrative to interpret their own lives. Through narrative they enter and create other worlds. Narrative is an enticing pathway for representing, understanding and engaging with human experience and with ideas.
STAGE 4 (Years 7-8)
Students understand that narrative shapes and is shaped by one’s view of the world. Students learn that:
Learning Intention: To understand how to write effective narratives and persuasive narratives.
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Your first comment......
In the comment box below, add any aspect/s of writing that you would like to work on through this project.
Purpose: This update enables students to introduce themselves to the community, set their writing goals, become comfortable with the Scholar discussion forum, and emphasise the focus of the unit on writing.
Teaching Tips: As students create their avatars, emphasise the importance of internet safety and how they represent themselves in online environments - no racist, sexist or violent images. As this is an academic community, suggest literary figures for images and quotes for blips. Model this through your own avatar and/or the community avatar and blip.
The Learning by Design framework and the seven affordances, developed by Kalantzis and Cope (see New Learning website), underpin the design of this learning module. In particular:
Learning Intention: To understand what makes a great opening to a narrative.
Success Criteria
Your opening sentence or paragraph is where you hook your readers by making them want to read on. The first paragraph/s are called the orientation. The orientation is where you introduce:
Here are some examples of great openings.
There is an unusual situation in the setting (alien world) in Nineteen Eighty-Four by George Orwell.
It was a bright cold day in April, and the clocks were striking thirteen.
The characters and a conflict are in the opening of The Lion and the Mouse by Aesop.
A Lion lay asleep in the forest, his great head resting on his paws. A timid little Mouse came upon him unexpectedly, and in her fright and haste to get away, ran across the Lion's nose. Roused from his nap, the Lion laid his huge paw angrily on the tiny creature to kill her.
The characters are introduced by saying what they are not in The Witches by Roald Dahl.
In fairy-tales, witches always wear silly black hats and black coats, and they ride on broomsticks. But this is not a fairy-tale. This is about REAL WITCHES.
The author hints at the characters (who are not innocent), setting (Neverland), and what will happen in the end in Tiger Lily by Jodi Lynn Anderson.
Let me tell you something straight off. This is a love story, but not like any you’ve heard. The boy and the girl are far from innocent. Dear lives are lost. And good doesn’t win. In some places, there is something ultimately good about endings. In Neverland, that is not the case.
The setting (London) and plot (a big flood that will cause problems) are introduced in Dodger by Terry Pratchet.
The rain poured down on London so hard that it seemed that it was dancing spray, every raindrop contending with its fellows for supremacy in the air and waiting to splash down. It was a deluge.
Plot (a problem) and character (12 year old) are suggested in the opening of Kensuke’s Kingdom by Michael Morpurgo.
I disappeared on the night before my twelfth birthday.
The setting (Silent Vale) and the plot (a journey with a hint of danger) are introduced in Obernewtyn by Isobelle Carmody.
Before first light we set out for the Silent Vale. It was a day's journey and we were led by a tall gangling boy called Eli, who carried a small sword and two hunt knives at his belt. These were the only visible reminders that our journey involved danger.
Setting, characters and plot (there is a hint of mystery too) are included in the opening of Motel Morning-Star by Liam Davison.
Angelo remembers this place. Even as his father turns the car into the forecourt of the Morning-Star Motel, he knows he's been here before. He can't say when: before his mother left, before the motel was built? He can't be sure. But he's been here before.
Comment: Now find an opening paragraph that you think is good. Check books you have on your bookshelf, books at school or look online. Add your paragraph to the comment box. If possible, try to explain what makes it good.
Then read other students' posts - they may give you some good ideas! Comment on 1-2 that you thought were good, explaining why. In this way, you are identifying what makes a good orientation. Start with @Name so the person knows you are commenting on their comment.
Purpose: To engage students in thinking about how texts are written by exploring a range of openings to novels and to make them active knowledge makers in the learning community.
Teaching Tips: Students can read through the examples independently or the teacher can go through them, emphasising the variety of approaches of authors and how they typically do not start with when,where and who. In fact many start with the complication.
It is important that students comment on each other's comments so they are all contributing to the collaborative intelligence of the community.
If students wish to add multimodal elements to their comments, they can create their own update.
Learning Intention: To understand how an author/creator creates interest in a narrative through the complication/s, sequence of events and climax.
Success Criteria
The purpose of narratives is very straightforward - it is to tell a story and to entertain and sometimes to teach readers a lesson. It can be fact or fiction, realistic or imaginative, and it can be an adventure, fairy tale, myth, legend science fiction, fantasy, comedy, mystery or tragedy.
Once you have set the scene and introduced characters (and perhaps a hint of the story or plot) in your orientation, you can move on to the complication.
Complication: The complication is something that causes a problem for the characters and/or disrupts normal life. There can be more than one complication.
Sequence of Events: The complication sets off a sequence of interesting events. These events happen in the story as the main characters attempt to solve the problem.
Climax: The climax is often the point of highest tension in the narrative. It creates a turning point that leads to the resolution.
To understand these terms better, watch Dustin by the Dustin Team. In the retrieval chart, the complications and climax have been added to the table. Complete the chart. What is the sequence of events.? What is the resolution? You might have to watch the video a couple of times!
Comment: Find a short story or animation. Add its title, and copy and paste a link to the comment box. Then describe its complication/s, sequence of events and climax. Read through students' comments and comment on 1-2, discussing anything that you found interesting.
Purpose: This update focuses on introducing/revising complication/s, sequence of events and climax.
Teaching Tips: There is a lot of reading in this update so break it up with discussions through Think-Pair-Shares where students can discuss the sequence of events in "Dustin" as they complete the retrieval chart.
If preferred, print out the retrieval chart so students can complete it and hand it to you rather than submitting it through "Shares with Admins".
Start the first writing project now so that students can record some initial ideas and develop them as they learn more about narrative writing in the updates that follow.
If possible, negotiate the dates for drafts, peer reviews and revisions with the students.
Hi everyone
Great to see more have now joined our community. I have posted (insert number) updates so far and will post another this week. Remember these are optional but they will help you learn how to write good narratives. Even just reading what other students have written will help you. Also you can comment on their comments.
If you check your Notifications, you will see that you have received a "Work Request" to start your first writing project. Click on it and it will take you to Creator and to a new, blank work called “Untitled”. Go to About This Work/ Info to give the work a title (Do not start another new work).
Once you are in Creator, look around the Toolbar on the right. There is lots there to support you in About this Work. Open Feedback and then open the rubric. The rubric is another tool to help you to learn how to write good narratives. Keep it open and refer to it as you write.
The first project is not due until (insert date). Do not submit your draft until close to that date. You may learn more from the updates that I post and want to make some changes to improve it. After (insert date), you will receive Feedback Requests to review 2 other students' works. You will also receive feedback and then you can use this to revise your own work for final submission on (insert date). Check the timeline in Creator/About this Work/Project/Timeline.
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Good luck with your writing project. I will be checking in often so you can message me. Also, if you have a question, post it in the Comment box below. Maybe someone in the Community is wondering the same thing so you will be helping them. Also, if you can answer someone's question, do so.
Teachng Tip: If you are unable to meet face-to-face with students, post this update.
Learning Intention: To understand the effects of using three narrative techniques.
Success Criteria
This update focuses on three narrative techniques:
A good narrative will have a balance of these three techniques. There are many other narrative techniques such as point of view, imagery and symbolism.
DESCRIPTION
Read the following excerpt from The Hunger Games by Suzanne Collins. It is the night before Katniss and Peta go into the arena. As you read it, identify what senses (feelings, sight, taste, touch, smell and hearing) are included. Also look for adjectives and note the simile "My room feels like a prison cell".
The more anxious I am to find sleep, the more it eludes me. Finally, I am too restless to even stay in bed. I pace the floor, heart beating too fast, breathing too short. My room feels like a prison cell. If I don’t get air soon, I’m going to start to throw things again. I run down the hall to the door to the roof. It’s not only unlocked but ajar. Perhaps someone forgot to close it, but it doesn’t matter. The energy field enclosing the roof prevents any desperate form of escape. And I’m not looking to escape, only to fill my lungs with air. I want to see the sky and the moon on the last night that no one will be hunting me.
The roof is not lit at night, but as soon as my bare feel reach its tiled surface I see his silhouette, black against the lights that shine endlessly in the Capitol. There’s quite a commotion going on down in the streets, music and singing and car horns, none of which I could hear through the thick glass window panels in my room. I could slip away now, without him noticing me; he wouldn’t hear me over the din, But the night air’s so sweet, I can’t bear returning to that stuffy cage of a room. And what difference does it make? Whether we speak or not?
NARRATIVE PACING
Look at the following excerpt from The Life of Robinson Crusoe by Daniel Defoe (abridged):
Early one morning, no less than five canoes each with four savages on board, landed on my side of the island, and not upon the beach where they traditionally performed their ghastly acts. As one of the canoes landed, I noticed one of them leap onto the beach and sprint in my direction, as if he were fleeing to safety. He must be an intended victim of the cannibals, I thought. He didn't see me hidden in the shrubbery, but as he got closer, I jumped out, shooting a number of the cannibals. The fleeing man fell to the ground, fearfully, just at my feet. Seeing several of their companions lying and dying on the beach with small wounds created by what was to them a mysterious big bang, the remaining savages fled to their boats and took to sea.
DIALOGUE
Dialogue is a narrative technique that reveals characters' motivations and their reactions to other characters and events; it can also increase the pace of the narrative, especially after long descriptive passages.
If you are not sure how to punctuate dialogue in a narrative, just check the dialogue in any novel. Work out where the speech/quotation marks go, and particularly the use of capital letters, commas and full stops.
Comment: Find and post a short passage from a favourite novel. Then describe what narrative technique/s it demonstrates. Read through other students' comments and comment on 1-2 that you found interesting or learnt something.
Purpose: Students learn about three narrative techniques by exploring excerpts from texts and then finding their own to add to the community.
Teaching Tips: If students explore the texts in class rather than independently, encourage them to work in pairs to read and discuss each section of description, narrative pacing and dialogue, before posting their own examples to the discussion forum.
Learning Intention: To understand how to write effective resolutions to your narrative.
Success Criteria:
After the narrative climax, there is generally some falling action where the events of the story begin to come to a close. This is followed by the resolution where the problem or conflict is solved. It is also where you tie up any loose ends and give the reader a sense of what happens to the characters as a result of the conflict/problem.
Watch Jack, Jack Attack. It has an interesting structure in that the narrative starts with the falling action where Carrie is interviewed by Agent Dicker. This occurs before we view the climax where Jack Jack turns into a fireball. The resolution where Carrie's memory is erased gives us a sense that Carrie can return to her normal life. There are many different narrative structures such as:
Each book in the Harry Potter series by J.K. Rowling resolves the conflict that Harry faces. In the first book, Harry Potter and the Philosopher's Stone (1997), Harry faces up to Voldemort who has taken over the body of Quirell. He is rescued by Professor Dumbledore in the climax of the novel. This is followed by the falling action where Harry recovers in hospital and the characters return to normal life at school, followed by the school holidays. In the concluding paragraphs, there is humour too.
It was Uncle Vernon, still purple-faced, still moustached, still looking furious at the nerve of Harry, carrying an owl in a cage in a station full of ordinary people. Behind him stood Aunt Petunia and Dudley, looking terrified at the very sight of Harry.
'You must be Harry's family!' said Mrs Weasley.
'In a manner of speaking,' said Uncle Vernon. 'Hurry up, boy, we haven't got all day.' He walked away.
Harry hung back for a last word with Ron and Hermoine. 'See you over the summer, then.'
'Hope you have - er - a good holiday,' said Hermoine,looking uncertainly after Uncle Vernon, shocked that anyone could be so unpleasant.
'Oh I will,' said Harry, and they were surprised by the grin that was spreading over his face. 'They don't know we're not allowed to use magic at home. I'm going to have a lot of fun with Dudley this summer......'
Comment: Post an example of a resolution of a narrative. Include a quote or a videoclip. Read other students' posts and comment on 1-2 that you found interesting, explaining why.
Purpose: In this update students learn about resolutions as well as exploring different narrative structures where the placement of the resolution determines the structure, e.g. chronological order, flashback, parallel structure, and circular.
Teaching Tips: Again students may work independently on this update or work with a partner in class, discussing ideas, before posting to the community.
Learning Intention: To identify the role of the coda in a narrative.
Success Criteria:
Some narratives are purely entertaining while others might conclude with an important life lesson or moral. Codas are optional. A coda might:
Remember "Dustin" in the update about complications. There is a coda at the end about friendship and how working together is better than competing. This shows what the robot has learned and we can also apply the coda to our own lives.
Fairy tales, fables and myths often include a coda. It is the author's evaluation through a short comment/reflection on what has happened. Read Aesop's fable - The Lion and the Mouse
A Lion lay asleep in the forest, his great head resting on his paws. A timid little Mouse came upon him unexpectedly, and in her fright and haste to get away, ran across the Lion's nose. Roused from his nap, the Lion laid his huge paw angrily on the tiny creature to kill her. "Spare me!" begged the poor Mouse. "Please let me go and some day I will surely repay you." The Lion was much amused to think that a Mouse could ever help him. But he was generous and finally let the Mouse go. Some days later, while stalking his prey in the forest, the Lion was caught in the toils of a hunter's net. Unable to free himself, he filled the forest with his angry roaring. The Mouse knew the voice and quickly found the Lion struggling in the net. Running to one of the great ropes that bound him, she gnawed it until it parted, and soon the Lion was free. "You laughed when I said I would repay you," said the Mouse. "Now you see that even a Mouse can help a Lion."
A kindness is never wasted.
Comment: Find and comment on a coda in a narrative. It could be from any of the narratives that you have posted about before. Describe its message, moral or lesson. Read other students' comments and comment. You could add other morals/lessons/messages that you could see in the narratives that people post about.
Purpose: Students explore author's purpose and relevance through learning about codas.
Teaching Tips: Again students may work independently on this update or work with a partner in class, discussing ideas, before posting to the community.
Learning Intention: To understand how to make your writing more cohesive.
Success Criteria:
Read The Bonfire
When I was a child, cracker night was one my favorite holidays. Well, it used to be until the year that I turned 11 years old. That is a time that I will never forget. In the afternoon, on the day of our planned fireworks, my little brother and I collected firewood and stacked it into a teepee-like shape in the paddock near our house.
Firstly, we collected fallen twigs and branches that were easy to carry. Before long, we had a small pile that we added to with some bigger branches and logs that we dragged to the fire. What's more, we found some old furniture but had to get the old wheelbarrow as we were not strong enough to move them ourselves. After a few hours of carrying and stacking, we stood back to admire our work. We were excited as we thought about the evening ahead, knowing also that it was a special treat to stay up late.
We watched the sun slowly set. Then, it was time! Our mum lit the fire while our dad prepared the fireworks. We watched as the flames grew bigger and bigger. At first, the small twigs burned but as the heat of the flames increased, the old furniture started to burn too. The fire grew bigger and bigger, hotter and hotter. We stared at the flames, totally captivated.
Suddenly, a strong wind swept through the field. Next, the fire went beyond the top of our teepee and two of the nearby trees caught fire. The fire was quickly out of control and we knew we were in danger. We panicked when we saw that our house was in the line of the fire. Our parents wanted to save the house but they knew that the most important thing was to get us all to safety. That’s when we heard a screeching siren in the distance. The fire brigade was on its way.
Later, when the firemen had put out the fire, we could see how close the fire had come to our house. We were all so grateful to them and to our neighbor who had telephoned 000. As a result, we received a talk about fire safety. Whenever I think about this experience, I remember how frightened we were. We didn’t even care that we didn’t light our fireworks. I will never forget this day for as long as I live.
Consequently, Australia Day became our favorite holiday and we would always look forward to watching the fireworks on the lake from the safety of our picnic blankets and deck chairs.
Connectives
Writing cohesively is about organising your text in a logical way that helps a reader to understand it. Text connectives are words that help you to make your writing more cohesive. Text connectives are also called signal words as they provide a signal to the reader about how the text is developing. They also link ideas within a paragraph and also between paragraphs where they can help you to make a transition from one paragraph to another.
Connectives have different purposes:
See examples of the different types of text connectives in the "Share" in our community.
In "The Bonfire", the text connectives are mainly used to sequence ideas and show time. There are two that show cause and effect and one adds more information. Can you find them?
Comment: Choose a short paragraph that includes some text connectives from a favourite book (you could also choose a paragraph from "The Bonfire"). In the comment box, write out the paragraph and then rewrite it, selecting different text connectives. What sort of text connectives did you use (sequencing ideas or showing time, adding information, clarifying ideas, showing cause and effect, and/or showing condition/concession). Did the new words change the meaning?
Purpose: This update focuses on grammar. It provides a mentor text to explore text connectives in context and then for students to engage with the text by providing alternatives.
Teaching Tips: Start their second writing project on persuasive narratives.
Learning Intention: To extend your understanding of narratives by exploring persuasive narratives.
Success Criteria:
Persuasive narratives are narratives that present an argument. They are similar to a coda in some ways (see Update 7), but while the coda generally occurs at the end of a narrative, a persuasive narrative sets out to persuade the reader from its beginning.
Read through "Passive Emotions" which is an example of a persuasive narrative written by a year 11 student.
PASSIVE EMOTIONS
A story to promote non-smoking
The small lounge-room was completely dark except for a thin strip of dismal, grey light which shone through a gap between the curtains from a street lamp outside. The room was shrouded in smoke, cigarette smoke. It was thickest in the darkest corner of the room. In this corner, sitting in a rocking chair, was a balding, middle aged man.
The few thin strands on his hair lifted in the slight breeze created by a fan standing across the room. His clothes reeked of the foul smelling smoke. His wrinkled face looked as if he was mourning something, or someone, he had cherished. From one of his hands came the dull red glow of a cigarette. He seemed oblivious to the world around him. Lost deep in his mind and memories of a happier past.
A tear trickled simply down his cheek while his eyes were locked on a photograph he was holding in his hand. From the picture a beautiful young bride in a floral dress smiled up at him. She had been his wife and he had loved her like life itself. Two days ago she had died prematurely, and painfully from lung cancer.
“Smoking related,” the doctor had said. Yet she had never smoked once in all her life. She had been a passive smoker.
He remembered how they used to sit together, arms around each other. As he enjoyed his cigarettes she would inhale the smoke he expelled. Throughout their twenty years of happy marriage she had continually, gently lovingly urged him to stop smoking, but all in vain. He had shunned the idea, never listening to her. She had always said smoking was endangering his life. Neither of them had imagined that she was the one whose life was endangered, that her life was under threat. Why hadn't he listened to her? Now she was gone from him forever.
He looked down at the cigarette in his hand and watched the white paper blackening and disappear in smoke. The tiny red glow slowly burning its way towards his fingers, releasing the poisons which had killed her and were probably killing him. He felt the rage and grief well up inside him and focus on the tiny tube of tobacco. Then suddenly, with a violent jab of his hand, he crushed the murderous thing, extinguishing the burning tip, and cursed the day he had first set one of those deadly cigarettes to his lips.
Tim
Comment: How is "Passive Emotions" the same and different to narratives and persuasive texts/arguments? Add one idea to the comment box (leave some for others to comment on). Explain the element and where appropriate, add an example/short quote. Consider elements such as narrative structure and, narrative techniques, and draw on your prior knowledge of the elements of persuasive texts such as a thesis or point statement and evidence.
Purpose: In this update students compare and contrast narrative and persuasive texts in order to develop their understandings of the concepts of narrative and persuasion and to see how a narrative text can be persuasive.
Teaching Tips: To scaffold the metacognitive comment in the discussion forum, an option is to print the text and with a highlighter and pen, students annotate the text, identifying features of a persuasive text in the narrative.
Learning Intention: To understand how to use rhetorical devices to make a text more persuasive.
Success Criteria:
Rhetorical devices are language choices (words, phrases, sentences) to persuade an audience to consider alternative perspectives.They are used in persuasive texts, including persuasive narratives. Examples of some rhetorical devices are:
"Passive Emotions" is a very persuasive narrative. Look at an excerpt and note the use of four rhetorical devices on one paragraph to persuade the reader about the effects of passive smoking:
He remembered how they used to sit together, arms around each other. As he enjoyed his cigarettes she would inhale the smoke he expelled. Throughout their twenty years of happy marriage she had continually, gently lovingly urged him to stop smoking, but all in vain. He had shunned the idea, never listening to her. She had always said smoking was endangering his life. Neither of them had imagined that she was the one whose life was endangered, that her life was under threat. Why hadn't he listened to her? Now she was gone from him forever.
Comment: Six rhetorical devices are discussed in this update. Find an example of one of these six or find another rhetorical device and provide an example from "Passive Emotions" or from a novel or short story that you know. Read other students' comments and comment on 1-2 that you think you might include in your persuasive narrative.
Purpose: Students deepen their understanding of rhetorical devices and how they can be used in a narrative.
Teaching Tips: Use the hard copy of the narrative to further annotate by identifying the rhetorical devices.
Learning Intention: To understand how lexical chains can create mood in a narrative.
Success Criteria
Look at another excerpt from "Passive Emotions".
The few thin strands on his hair lifted in the slight breeze created by a fan standing across the room. His clothes reeked of the foul smelling smoke. His wrinkled face looked as if he was mourning something, or someone, he had cherished. From one of his hands came the dull red glow of a cigarette. He seemed oblivious to the world around him. Lost deep in his mind and memories of a happier past.
Words such as thin, reeked, foul smelling, wrinkled, mourning, dull, oblivious and lost create a negative mood. These words work together to create lexical cohesion.
Similarly, you can change the mood of a text by selecting words that are positive.
Here is an example:
Negative: The child has a scabby coat of sheepskin to keep out the cold.
Positive: The child has a ruffled coat of sheepskin to keep in the warmth.
Lexical cohesion refers to relationships between and among words in a text. Lexical chains group a series or string of words that connect in some way. There may be more than one lexical chain in a text and writers deliberately use them to create certain effects.
Comment: Take a small section (1 or 2 sentences) of a text and replace words in the lexical chain with synonyms that are more positive or more negative. Write the new sentences in the Comment box and describe how the changes have affected the mood of the text. Read and comment on the sentences of other students and add your thoughts about how the mood is changed by the new sentences.
Purpose: In this update students experiment with creating lexical chains and deepening their understanding of how language choice can create mood in a text.
Teaching Tips: Students will generally enjoy the creative and scaffolded activity of rewriting existing sentences in a text with a more positive/negative tone. Reading the language suggestions of other students, building on their ideas, collaborating, and using a thesaurus will also expand their thinking and their vocabulary.
Learning Intention: To provide feedback on the Scholar digital writing course.
Success Criteria:
You have just participated in the first online extension writing course in Scholar at your school. To evaluate the course, we would welcome you feedback.
Comment: The survey will provide feedback to Rita and to teachers and the executive of your school. You can also post any other general comments to be read by other course participants here.
Title: Love to write (Source); Fig.4: Writing quote (Source); Fig.3: Narrative Structure (Source); Fig. 5: Narrative Techniques (Source); Fig. 7: The Lion and the Mouse from Project Gutenberg (Source); Fig. 8: The Bonfire - Photograph by Rita van Haren; Fig. 9: Cigarette by "realworkhard" on Pixabay (Source); Fig. 11: Grief by johnhain on Pixabay (Source); 12. Thanks by Hypnoart on Pixabay (Source).